Isaac Murphy

ENGL101 12 PM session
Damascus High School Graduate and baseball player.
I'm very competitive and I am really bad at English.

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6) My least favorite coursework was from 11/15, this required the reading of a lengthy article on Oxycontin, and then a lengthy reading out of the textbook culminating in a short essay, it was just too much for one coursework
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1) Run on sentences that tried to complete too much at once
2) More concise to the point sentences that leave higher impact
3) The article on Justine Sacco that started our class was an intriguing article on the effects of social media in society
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4) "A Catastrophic Failure of Prediction" was my least favorite reading as I am very much not an economist and the contents just bored me.
5) The first online coursework we did was my favorite as we were allowed to simply write, with no real bounds to what we could do
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After, friend: I was going to work in the city today and there must have been 10 times that i got cut off, I must have spent a solid 10 minutes just laying on my horn, not to mention the hours spent in stop and go traffic. I swear this traffic needs to stop. #flamm101

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Before, academic: The squeal of the brakes as you screech to yet another stop. Halting any and all forward progress for the 20th time in the last 8 minutes. All hope of timeliness having disappeared. The rage as you lay on the horn at the imbecile that just cut you off. #flamm101

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*b) "Public transportation of the future: Four new sustainable technologies" by Amanda Cunningham was a rather memorable piece for me as it gave me insight into the future of the Public Transport industry

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a) The rage of incompetent drivers cutting you off and the inevitable tailgating and the incessant honking soon to ensue.
b) This new technology proposed by SpaceX’s Elon Musk is capable of moving people at aircraft speeds for the price of a bus ticket.
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@gfalcone19 You could maybe change the wording to "Music has equally measurable impacts on both mental and physical rehabilitation." #flamm101

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3) For public transport to continue in society and continue to grow it must cut some of the unnecessary costs it currently has. *
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1) If public transport is to effectively replace cars it needs to be more efficient and far more accessible.
2) In order for public transport to cut emissions in cities it must itself not be a source of toxic waste. #Flamm101

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Carlin's argument is geared as comedy routine and is most likely meant to be taken as more joke than fact, whereas Klein's argument is in a much more professional setting and is meant to be taken seriously. So the audience for Carlin would not be as receptive as Klein's #Flamm101

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The logic behind Klein's argument seems much more sound and offers more evidence as backup, where as most of what Carlin says seems more as opinion than fact. #Flamm101

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Gladwells blending of evidence to paint a picture for the reader to see allows him to truly demonstrate his point. The initial interrogation of LaDue was rather memorable. Some of the research papers he cited did not carry that same impact, but were also helpful in the argument.

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Before:
What qualifies as breakfast, lunch, and dinner?
Am I insane?
After:
What meals can be qualified as breakfast, lunch, or dinner, and how do we classify them properly?
Due to my talking to myself for 30 minutes has my mind been driven to a state of madness?
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@kirafreedman01 You could also consider not even splitting it into two sentences, but just eliminating a portion of the sentence. I would personally shorten it to, "Crying is a human thing, everyone has to cry sometimes."

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I changed this sentence to "To stereotype someone, most of us know what its like to be stereotyped in one or another. And most people in society tend to try to stay away from stereotyping." In doing this I cut some of the unnecessary fluff of my paper. #flamm101

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"To stereotype someone, most of us know what its like to be stereotyped in one or another. And most people in society tend to try to stay away from stereotyping, however in today’s world its practically impossible not to." #flamm101

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10 verbs I used in my rough draft
1) is
2) try
3) stay
4) raised
5) learn
6) discovered
7) shattered
8) offer
9) influenced
10) believe
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I got feedback on how i focused a bit much on the authors life rather than the context of the situation
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