@patio11 Since writing myself I've become much more sensitive to the implausible "fridge logic" moments, like "Wait a second, how did the estranged friend who abandoned the hero make it into final chamber of the forbidden tomb at the exact right moment to punch the gloating bad guy?"
A bit I had to retire when I left an employer, recorded for posterity:
"<employer> Field Finance: The Movie.
In the years since the legacy FARS record keeping system was abandoned for a newer, shinier program, it was all but forgotten. But FARS was record keeper; FARS never forgot. It festered in the shadows, developing a malevolent intelligence, gathering power.
Now, it's time has come. In its first strike it eliminate Jim from IT, its creator, the one man who could threaten it.
Humanity's only hope: Assemble a ragtag band of former <employer> Field Finance staff to dust off their old skills and prepare one last monthly upload while they still have a chance."
My character was the star, obviously, and I would then describe how a chopper would come to my remote mountaintop cabin and I would be like "I swore I'd never go back..."
I used to boast that I was one of the top 5 FARS users in the world. It was probably true.
The core storytelling problem with Supergirl(/man) is that she's overpowered, and the movie had it solved at the beginning. She was strong under the red sun, but manageably so. She bled in the barfight.
And the villain was grounded! He'd lost his ship! They were all set up to have the whole movie on that one planet, where the bad guy was a credible threat, and then they just ditched it, and had to resort to contrivances like poison and kryptonite and that crazy planet where the suns rotate like a traffic light.
AND the symbolism is right there! Kara's fleeing community and it's bad for her, and the red sun makes her a lesser version of herself.
Then in the climax, the villain could have the upperhand and be gloating and open a dimensional window to her new home to taunt her with one last look, and then the yellow sun shines through and the music swells and we're off to the races
Supergirl peaked when she got to the yellow sun and fought off the space pirates. The plot after that dragged and the fights/power levels were confusing.
They should've had the whole movie in a red sun system and then at the end she gets the yellow sun to save the day
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Editors never cease to amaze me
"Just booked my flight. Excited for the wedding!"
"Yay! Where are you staying?"
"Haven't booked that yet. Wherever's cheap."
"Ok. Stick to the east side."
"What's wrong with the west side?"
"It's the murder capital of the country most years"
"Oh."
"Most murders are by former significant others, so you'll be fine."
"But you invited my ex to your wedding"
"True, but I didn't put you two at the same table."
Travel update: moved flight earlier to avoid weather. Flight got delayed due to maintenance. Found another flight, that then also got delayed, but not before they let a bunch of Newark passengers board a flight to West Palm Beach.
I asked Claude if the story was plausible, and this part got me:
"The one place the story glosses over reality is regulatory, not mechanical: a boiler built and certified for mobile excavation duty wouldn't have been certified for stationary building service, and you'd want a boiler inspector to sign off before piping it into occupied-building radiators. But mechanically, the premise holds up"
Finished first-pass editing my last book Sunday night, told nephew he could read it last night, he finished an hour ago.
I may not have the largest quantity of readers, but by golly I've got quality