Will Wilt

biz major, hoping to graduate before I run out of loan options. might mess around and try to impact the world after. who knows?

[Will Wilt @Engl101Will]

@engl101alivia I think that telling your anecdote in the third person will be a very empowering perspective. It makes the anecdote feel more personal and impactful to the reader. I may utilize this method as I move forward with my paper! #flamm101

[Will Wilt @Engl101Will]

#flamm101 1. To sum up the papers, both writers had successful conclusions that left me feeling educated and at ease with what I read
2. In comparison with the Opioid paper, I too rely heavily on a personal excerpt. I believe this is a good tactic for health-issue papers

[Will Wilt @Engl101Will]

I have cultivated exigence in my paper by using both personal anecdotes and one from an article. This conveys a sense of urgency because it shows that so many people are affected by the issue. I also utilize hard data to convey the issue from a statistical standpoint. #flamm101

[Will Wilt @Engl101Will]

Working Thesis: Unethical advertising techniques in the tobacco and e-cigarette industries, particularly on social media, have caused teens and young adults to take a liking to nicotine products. #flamm101

[Will Wilt @Engl101Will]

@engl101hannahb I like that I can see more than just ideas about your paper. I can clearly see jumping-off points. At the same time, I can see solutions begin to form through your ideas.

[Will Wilt @Engl101Will]

#flamm101 Unethical Advertising and Big Tobacco

[Will Wilt @Engl101Will]

CONT: examples of tweets from our president. They mention it briefly but don't go into detail. It would be a good counterpoint to their argument

[Will Wilt @Engl101Will]

Module 9 - Writing Sample #2 #flamm101
1) the author includes the story of the abortion bill in Texas which showcases the urgency
2) the overall argument would be that social media can make a difference in regards to policy
3) I would suggest adding ...

[Will Wilt @Engl101Will]

CONT:
... that the person in the second anecdote felt

[Will Wilt @Engl101Will]

Module 9 - Writing Sample #1 #flamm101
1) the authors use of anecdotes allows the reader to feel attached to this, thus it is urgent
2) the larger argument would be that social media isn't all bad, there are some positive externalities
3) focus more on the positive aspects ...

[Will Wilt @Engl101Will]

@engl101hannahb I think your weak one is good!! I would just suggest applying examples as you dive into the details of writing out your argument. I do not see any need to change your PoV, but instead elaborate with personal examples or statistics from an academic study. #flamm101

[Will Wilt @Engl101Will]

*1.Unethical advertising has affected the health of the average American.
2.Unethical advertising is a leading cause of consumerism in America.
3.Unethical advertising has led to the youth population being taken advantage of.
#flamm101

[Will Wilt @Engl101Will]

@engl101hannahb Suggestion: "This quote allows the reader to be affected by both the ethos of pathos tools of rhetoric, making it a very powerful statement". #flamm101

[Will Wilt @Engl101Will]

HELP! "By establishing herself as a pundit of both consensual economics and monetary economics, Marling contextualizes data to bring light to the overarching problem". I feel like using economics twice is redundant. Anybody have any ideas? #flamm101

[Will Wilt @Engl101Will]

uses, serves, touches, conveys, transitions, showcases, tells, establish, creates, addresses #flamm101

[Will Wilt @Engl101Will]

"Be more specific. What do you mean every, what are they?" This really helped me narrow down and specify what I was trying to address! Moving forward, this is the kind of feedback I am looking for. Helping me narrow down my sentences!! #flamm101

[Will Wilt @Engl101Will]

@engl101hannahs I completely agree. To further your point, I feel like the limitations on writing that make it feel uncomfortable are also what stifle our creativity and ability to express our true thoughts!

[Will Wilt @Engl101Will]

It truly be a shame that folks in this here Land of the Free be hatin on the words we use and the backgrounds we be coming from. Even Microsoft word don’t wanna let me be me. #flamm101

[Will Wilt @Engl101Will]

so in essence, i hope i pass english 101 so i can pay off my student debt and not default on my loans and end up living with my parents until mcdonalds hires me #flamm101

[Will Wilt @Engl101Will]

i'm soooo excited to take a class i took as a junior in high school but forgot to take the ap test for so now i probably won't graduate in four years because i'm behind on credits so i'm not going to get hired and won't be able to pay off my student loans #flamm101