Daniel Soler

Hello, it's nice to meet everyone! My furry friend up there is Scooby; he's also very excited to meet y'all!
P.S. Sorry in advance for the spelling mistakes...

[Daniel Soler @HelloIamDannyS]

#LTMP2 The Serenity of Fear
https://t.co/iwq3U3XmiN

[Daniel Soler @HelloIamDannyS]

@KellyV_209 Although what you say is powerful with excessive spacing, it's easy for the audience to forget what you are talking about. The loss of connectivity creates a loss of power for your story. #peerreview3

[Daniel Soler @HelloIamDannyS]

@KellyV_209 While you definitely have a lot of raw material to work with visually, I think you are going to need a fair bit of work on the auditory portion. Right now, it feels feels like like a lecture and more like a fragmented story. #peerreview3

[Daniel Soler @HelloIamDannyS]

@KellyV_209 I also don't think you have any still images, which is a problem according to the rubric. One way you could add them is that in these pauses between thoughts, you could add symbolism of their death or just other images of dogs being unaware of the subject #peerreview3

[Daniel Soler @HelloIamDannyS]

@KellyV_209 Second, I appreciate the pauses between the sentences/statements. I don't think that you quite need some long passes between every sentence. They should be reserved for statements with the treatment meaning in the piece. #peerreview3

[Daniel Soler @HelloIamDannyS]

@KellyV_209 The first thing off the bat is I think this project definitely needs to be trimmed down a bit. Probably a good bit, actually #peerreview3

[Daniel Soler @HelloIamDannyS]

@Parth50931599 To add to this, maybe some of the bloopers could be added as part of this, showing how this hand placement leads to you missing your shots while others do not. But other than that, it was a great project so far. #peerreview3

[Daniel Soler @HelloIamDannyS]

@Parth50931599 I really like your project, especially the visuals, because it seems like you had a lot of fun collecting them. I especially like seeing the blooper reel at the end; that was a nice added touch. #peerreview3

[Daniel Soler @HelloIamDannyS]

@Parth50931599 I would also recommend that when showing how to shoot while the picture did a good job, it might be good to spend a little time explaining the mechanisms behind the different hand placements and why the first orientation was bad. #peerreview3

[Daniel Soler @HelloIamDannyS]

@Parth50931599 One thing I would recommend in terms of visuals is to raise the caption higher up on the screen and always make sure that they are a color that will not be difficult to read during certain scenes. #peerreview3

[Daniel Soler @HelloIamDannyS]

@mayunahm I also really wanted to say I love the name of your project. I think it perfectly symbolizes the messages you are portraying about culture/race and its importance and challenges, especially within a less racially tolerant society. #peerreview3

[Daniel Soler @HelloIamDannyS]

@mayunahm Another thing that I think would just be nice is if, in the video, you show the end project of the very same one you will be working on throughout the video. I think it would bring the video full circle better, but in no way is the change absolutely necessary.#peerreview3

[Daniel Soler @HelloIamDannyS]

@mayunahm It also seems that you cluster all your media together. You still have images and videos. What might be good in between these pauses of your stories is you add the still images and continue with a tutorial on how to make origami as you continue with your stories #peerreview3

[Daniel Soler @HelloIamDannyS]

@mayunahm I like your use of pauses between your stories of racism. It allows the audience to digest what you have said and really appreciate the gravity of the situation. #peerreview3

[Daniel Soler @HelloIamDannyS]

@jai_patel44 Overall, I think your project is very good so far. I just think that if you organized it in a way that told a better flow of a story on both ends, then it could add to the experience of both portions of your anti-lecture. #peerreview3

[Daniel Soler @HelloIamDannyS]

@jai_patel44 I also think it would be good for you to use more of the video editing techniques that we've learned in class, strategic sound placements, and the purposeful use of pauses. Ex: You could choose to pair great facts about Drake with you kicking the ball. #peerreview3

[Daniel Soler @HelloIamDannyS]

@jai_patel44 Similarly, even though you do a very good job with it already, it might be good to reorganize your follow of thought explaining Drake's superiority, like the way you would in a persuasive argument essay #peerreview3

[Daniel Soler @HelloIamDannyS]

@jai_patel44 Which is fine, but I think it would be worth it to order your video and images in a way that shows your progression. #peerreview3

[Daniel Soler @HelloIamDannyS]

@jai_patel44 For example, I remember in your pitch you said that you would be sort of a "kicking" tutorial or at least showing the process of you kicking or processing over time, but your videos now seem like mostly just a real highlight.#peerreview3

[Daniel Soler @HelloIamDannyS]

@jai_patel44 My gut response is that I think you did a great job with your corporation of media, but auditory and visually, I just would just think that you might have to work on formatting what you are saying to try and tell a more cohesive story #peerreview3