@CifarettoStan@Bmk6971@iantheluvr Okay so since you're playing this game:
How about this (watch out, massive spoiler for Sunrise on the Reaping)?
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The woman you love asks you one final thing before dying. And by using "rise on the reaping", she means "make sure there won't be any reaping at all"
@__stvnnn Je l'ai revu hier soir (pour genre la 6-7ème fois :D), non seulement je le trouve toujours sublime, mais y a des passages, je veux me les injecter (l'arbre, le tout début et la toute fin, la fôret, les chansons de Lucy Gray....)
@ptoybox23 OMG, thank you so much!!!!! It seems people can't just enjoy simple phrases, or even sweet moments.
And with this AI era, it's getting worse.......
@farttttttttttt2@hayffiestrinket OMG someone is dying, let's manipulate readers emotionallt by writing sad stuff, crafting a scene and so on..............
REALLY?
@notfaithfully@stonedMeeMees@hayffiestrinket The context makes everything. It does seem like urgent or sudden in the first passage. Something HAPPENED. And as it's about a character who's not with Katniss, she can tell us what she thinks. In the second one, something IS happening and Haymitch IS living it.
@notfaithfully@stonedMeeMees@hayffiestrinket And one more time: the chapter ends with this passage and the very next chapter takes its time to describe what Haymitch is feeling!
@notfaithfully@stonedMeeMees@hayffiestrinket The context makes everything. It does seem like urgent or sudden in the first passage. Something HAPPENED. And as it's about a character who's not with Katniss, she can tell us what she thinks. In the second one, something IS happening and Haymitch IS living it.
@notfaithfully@hayffiestrinket One more thing (let me use films, for this one): Remember some deaths in Mockingjay Part 2? We see these deaths and yet we continue a bit. And after a little while, we deal with these deaths’ impact!!! Is it still "bad writing"?
@notfaithfully@hayffiestrinket Also! We’re in Haymitch POV. You really think it would be appropriate that we get lots of details during this exact scene? Does not the NEXT chapter (that starts RIGHT AFTER this excerpt) achieve it?