@DeleonAnde59945 I like the premise of this one too! I'm glad you're focusing on the world than immediately going into the crossover aspect with no buildup. I think it's the same as I said before with some altering to the sentences and more in character, but other than that, you got it down!
@DeleonAnde59945 Solid so far. If I had to give some constructive criticism, I would fix the grammar, maybe slightly alter the personality of the characters, and maybe alter some sentences so it doesn't sound repetitive (for example, said (character), asked (character). other than that, good job!