Shared a draft of a teaser for my WIP TV pilot, using the FD beat board to not get as lost as I did in a recent rewrite, this morning on the train, cutting pages from a bloated rewrite of another TV pilot, stronger more aligned engine, but needs to be leaner.
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WIP, ASHES. A withdrawn funeral director in a dying Rust Belt town uncovers a pattern of suspicious deaths tied to the opioid trade, forcing him to choose between protecting the grieving families he serves, or exposing the truth that’s killing them.
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@deborahbetenew I`m writing a sci-fi short as a practice because I was interviewed by a production company and their next film is slated to be science fiction.
@deborahbetenew@BogeyGuyC@EricLotter@PhoenixBlackNow Honored to be among these names. Create curiosity in the first sentence. Lead with hook not the plot, I think people want the feeling of the show not the plot. Sell the engine and the character with a contradiction, it’s more memorable. Escalate and include a holy shit moment.
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THE ADVOCATE. A corporate fixer who specializes in silencing whistle-blowers sees his carefully constructed life begin to collapse when a former target resurfaces with evidence that could expose him and the corrupt system he built from the inside out.
Typhoon over Honshu in Japan allowed me a day off to get in six to seven hours of writing, I completed a teaser for a new TV pilot, and aligned another four acts, a teaser and a tag with a stronger clearer story engine, good start to the end of the second quarter. #scriptchat
@deborahbetenew Based on what I've read of your work, we share a similar sardonic tone? I'll keep an eye out and like, comment and repost your stuff when I can. I hope you're having a great week and thank you again for your support, it's appreciated and doesn't go unnoticed.
@deborahbetenew Thank you Deborah, I wrote it about a year ago when I was exploring genre blending, I really appreciate your comments here, I hope I do to!
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THE NEW RIGHT. A reformed ex-extremism is pulled into a covert war against a rising nationalist movement discovering his brother is being radicalized from within forcing him to go undercover and destroy the organization before it consumes them both.