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SERVICE: SCRIPT CONSULTANT / DIALOGUE SPECIALIST
SKILL: Making MADE-UP Characters Sound REALLY Good!
EMAIL: [email protected]

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INVITATION: THINK you can WRITE better DIALOGUE than the BEST? Then. . .SHOW & TELL!

“OUT-WRITE” CHALLENGE # 2: "KILLING EVE."

Pick (max!) SIX FAVORITE Lines from your FAVORITE SCENE! Then GO (max!) SIX LINES BETTER!

See my EXAMPLE(S) below:-

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@babycowLtd @edfringe @ThePleasance @marydoesgigs @ImpatientUK @elf_lyons Women livin' 'In da PINK!" About daay-yum time.

(. . .I KNOW who I'll BET my MONEY on.)

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REVISED:
V: Shut up? Or I swear no one’ll ever scream at you again!
I: I’m glad my dad kills people like you for a living!
V: Congrats? You’ve just scored a tiny coffin!
I: Are you going to kill me?
V: Not if you speak only when spoken to!
I: Well, I’ve never really agreed with--

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ORIG - SE1:EP8: “God. I’m Tired”

VILLANELLE/IRINA
V: Shut up or I'll blow your tiny head to pieces!
I: My dad is going to kill you in the face!
V: No, I am going to kill your dad in the face.
I: No, why?
V: Because you're dad is an arsehole.
I: You can't say shit about my dad!

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REVISED: BILL (B) & EVE (E)
B: Are you wearing a bra with that dress? This is an important meeting!
E: Sooo...women’s strongest points get made in braless meetings?
B: Well, when it comes to leaning in? Short skirts do help, too!

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SE1:EP3: “Don’t I Know You?”
ORIG: BILL (B)/EVE (E)
B: You can't wear a bra with that dress. Whip it off; this is an important meeting.
E: Oh, and important meetings require women to go braless?
B: Nooo, dresses like that require women to go braless. A monkey could tell you that.

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REVISED: EVE (E) & VILLANELLE (V)
E: …and I wonder what you hate for breakfast. You fill every space in my head!
V: I know what you mean. It’s your hand I feel between my---
E: Well, not...
V: Too soon?
E: Yes...call me cerebral? But you’re still stuck in the space in my head!

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SE1:EP8: “God. I’m Tired.”

ORIG: EVE (E) & VILLANELLE (V)
E: …and I think about what you had for breakfast. I just wanna know everything.
V: I think about you, too. I mean, I masturbate about you a lot.
E: OK, that's...
V: Too much?
E: No...I just, I just wasn't expecting that.

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REVISED:
V: Shut up? Or I swear no one'll ever scream at you again!
i: I’m glad my dad kills people like you for a living!
V: You just lost out on a nice coffin, then!
I: Are you going to kill me?
V: Not if you speak only when spoken to!
I: Well, I’ve never really agreed with---

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SE1:EP2: “I’ll Deal With Him Later"

THERAPIST (J) / VILLANELLE (V)

REVISED:
J: Concerns were raised about the state of your mind.
V: Better to have focused on the scope of my patience.
J: Have you experienced any loss of control, lately?
V: If I did? You'd be the first to know!

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SE1:EP2: “I’ll Deal With Him Later”
THERAPIST (J) / VILLANELLE (V)

ORIGINAL DIALOGUE:
J: There are concerns about your state of mind.
V: OK.
J: Have you been feeling any...anxieties or stress recently?
V: I had quite a heavy period last week, but other than that, I think I'm OK.

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SE1 : EP2: THERAPIST (J) & VILLANELLE (V)
ORIG. DIALOGUE:
V: I shot him twice in the heart and watched the spark drain from his eyes.
J: Did you talk to him?
V: A little. He said he had children and offered me money.
J: What did you feel when he said those things?
V: Impatient.

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REVISED DIALOGUE: SE1:EP1: “Nice Face.”

NIKO (N) /EVE (E)

E: Has the thought of killing me crossed your mind?

N: Since you just put it there, I can safely say it has.

E: How would you kill me? Knowing how I hate blood!

N: I’d mentally drain you. Just like you’re doing to me!

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INVITATION: THINK you can WRITE better DIALOGUE than the BEST? Then. . .SHOW & TELL!

“OUT-WRITE” CHALLENGE # 2: "KILLING EVE."

Pick (max!) SIX FAVORITE Lines from your FAVORITE SCENE! Then GO (max!) SIX LINES BETTER!

See my EXAMPLE(S) below:-

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ORIGINAL DIALOGUE: SE1:EP1: “Nice Face.”

NIKO (N) /EVE (E)

E: How would you kill me if you could?

N: Um, I don't know. Push you down the stairs?

E: No, seriously. They'd come for you immediately.

N: (LAUGHING) I don't know. Flatter you to death.

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@TheScriptLab @KevinHart4real I USED to be one? Until I "decided to believe" in ALSO being PAID.

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MOVIE: “Django Unchained” (2012)

CHARACTER(S): Django (D) and Vessepi (V)

REVISED DIALOGUE:
V: What’s your name?
D: Django.
V: Can you spell it?
D: D-J-A-N-G-0. D silent for those who know.
V: I know. . . (17 WORDS /1/2)

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MOVIE: “Django Unchained” (2012)

CHARACTER(S): Django (D) and Vessepi (V)

ORIGINAL DIALOGUE:
V: What’s your name?
D: Django.
V: Can you spell it?
D: D-J-A-N-G-0. The D is silent.
V: I know. (15 WORDS /2/2)

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@TheChurchOfTarantino
MOVIE: “Death Proof” (2015)

CHARACTER(S): Major Warren (W)

REVISED DIALOGUE:
W: You open your mouth? An’ a bullet’ll shut you up! Move a little sudden, act a little strange? A bullet’ll set you right! Not a warnin’? But a bullet! (29 /2/2)

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@TarantinoFC @TarantinoFANSUP
MOVIE: “Death Proof” (2015)

CHARACTER(S): Major Warren (W)

ORIGINAL DIALOGUE:
W: You open your mouth, you gonna get a bullet. Move a little sudden, a little strange, you gonna get a bullet. Not a warnin’, not a question. A bullet. (29 /2/2)

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MOVIE: “Death Proof” (2007)
CHARACTER(S): Mike (M:)
REVISED DIALOGUE:
M: I can tell you expected the fellas to fall into your lap! That kinda rejection must’ve hurt your feelings a bit! Luckily? Fate has a way of throwin’ people together. So! How ‘bout you come fall into mine?