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[moemenniges @moemenniges]

I can’t seem to access Emilie’s or Faiths from the class wix site #MyPortfolioEdit1101

[moemenniges @moemenniges]

@DanielCortez_36 #MyPortfolioEdit1101 your sight is really put together and detailed!

[moemenniges @moemenniges]

I think my site could be more streamlined in order to allow more ease of access

[moemenniges @moemenniges]

I need to restructure my Wix site to make it look more professional

[moemenniges @moemenniges]

@liyahladybird your peer edit is up!

[moemenniges @moemenniges]

I’m doing yours now! I’m sorry! It’s been a busy day😅

[aaliyah ʕ·ᴥ·ʔ @liyahladybird]

Never mind I found it :)

[moemenniges @moemenniges]

@1101Mauk Ah, I had sent you an invite on google meets😂 I’ll switch over !

[moemenniges @moemenniges]

@1101Mauk do we just use your email for the google hangouts?

[moemenniges @moemenniges]

@1101Mauk For the code or link do I use your email or do I have to log in to Twitter on the laptop first to click on your link?

[moemenniges @moemenniges]

Looking to include more sources in my final draft!

[moemenniges @moemenniges]

My general concern is that I formatted it incorrectly, or did a common mistake in phraseology

[moemenniges @moemenniges]

My next task is learning how to use google hangouts😅

[Margot Mauk @1101Mauk]

@moemenniges Stop in Google Hangouts for an optional conference during class tomorrow and get that feedback!

[moemenniges @moemenniges]

Draft is uploaded and I’m excited for a peer analysis as well as yours @1101Mauk !!

[moemenniges @moemenniges]

I agree. He expands too much on the parties and what the games are, instead of how the social situations pressure people

[aaliyah ʕ·ᴥ·ʔ @liyahladybird]

I feel as if the author shouldn’t exaggerates situations. For example when he was trying to put us in the mindset of the scenario. Not to mention he’s ranting as he writes. “Many college students have the impression that a party isn’t a party without
#NewAmericanWriting1101

[moemenniges @moemenniges]

The author does a fantastic job of collecting his thoughts, and arguing his point at the end. By laying out the pressure sources of college freshman to drink, as well as pointing out the common affects #proveyourpoint1101

[moemenniges @moemenniges]

His sources seem more apt to be in the correct areas, and better separated throughout his paper, supporting his claims with paraphrases and quotes. #draftevaluation1101

[moemenniges @moemenniges]

The next draft seems too do a better job at academic writing, though not as extensive as it should be. A greater expanse has been made about the effects of alcohol consumption. He expands on how alcohol is thought of in culture #draftevaluation1101

[moemenniges @moemenniges]

The student needs to reevaluate his academic tone, and perhaps review his wording before submitting. #toneitdown1101

[moemenniges @moemenniges]

The the student should perhaps explain the social structures of what makes people drink completely, BEFORE explaining what the exact effects alcohol has on academics. Cause and then effect. #organizeit1101

[moemenniges @moemenniges]

The student does a decent, if sporadic job of providing evidence #proveit1101