@yoishikata8 2nd one is filth and gross, not because of queer depiction I liked that in the first one but the for the Second one you deserved it. All you are a gross little filthy worm.
@cyrnosofia Ironic for JAPAN the Rapist.
In the end of the day Tezuka was a Japanese and held grudge for the gringos, completely forgetting the war crimes Japan had committed in the past.
@baitundschalter@AsuzuReincarnat@SonikBuster A few suggestions if you don't mind.
I think the rage and angst should show both in malfoid and Harry, like they are so in it they are literally in for kill. Harry's should be grief and betrayal where as Malfoid is breaking under pressure.
@AsuzuReincarnat I think after using deathly spell on Her Harry should fumble realizing what he has done you know go through the diary of half blood prince to find healing spell, like a manic until snape comes where he should be sobbing like crazy, telling snape to save her.